1 My partner strengths were how he describe the events because he made the events seem like they just happened.
2 Use some dialogie
3 There wasn't a literary device that caught my eye
4 The part that stands out most is when the convention was ending and they stood up and shouting.
1. The strengths of your essay are definitely the suspense of the final race, the devastation his injuries caused him (his expression of this), and his use of a timeline for the story's events.
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3. I enjoyed the personification of your times, for you were racing against them when he had no other rivals.
4. The part which stood out as the catchiest was your race where you got in 3rd against Jack and Albert. I felt that it was the most intense part which kept me reading to see what would happen.